We have been learning how to capture a "moment in time" with our writing. We try to imagine we are describing something we can see out of the window to someone who can't see it.
Here is a great piece of writing from Cole about a waterfall.
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As the water runs down the waterfall birds chirp and the water splashes onto the stream and the rocks laying there for tourists to jump over one by one. As the water falls down the miniature cliff it turns white in mid air then turns transparent again as it hits the water and the is grass as green as a pool of acid.
I can smell the fresh air going through my nostrils and the old leaves that smell like cinnamon fresh from the store. I can also smell the moss growing on the elderly rocks and the large stones catching dust.
I can feel the soft green grass on my knees as I bend down to feel the water. It's cold. I feel calm as I stare at the miniature waterfall and listen to the wind pushing the leaves around and the birds chirping at the same time.
By Cole
